Santa Turmoil
Twinkling
stars, bright villages. Christmas Eve. There's a boy named 'Jason' who is
intelligent and curious about many things. Because Christmas is coming, he
became curious about Santa’s existence. The sun is set and night started. Jason
could not bear curiously. 11 o’clock, 12 o’ clock Accidently, he could hear a
walking sound and saw a shadow! His heartbeat became quicker. Shadow became
larger with larger sound! Hush! Someone was there! Someone was go to the Christmas
tree and put something under it. But, it was his father. Jason surprised. His
father saw Jason and started hiccup. Jason got it!
I liked this drabble's choice of topic and general flow. It would be even better if we went over it and fixed some grammatical mistakes, though. Let's see if we get a chance to do that.
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